Thursday, October 06, 2005

Forgiven (was Forgotten)

Well, I've had a new guy bugging me for a while and I decided to give in to his demands. Saxxon wants a strong woman and he wants her to save him from the demons who own his soul. So here you go Saxxon, a woman strong enough to take you on and take them out.

Chapter One

Kelly Roberts shook her head to clear it of the confusing images that seemed to make no sense. Focus, a child’s life depended on it.

She put the car back in gear and pulled back into traffic. She’d circle the block again. There were always limits and she always pushed them. The police dropped her from the case officially when she wasn’t able to give any more specifics. That wasn’t good enough. She had tracked this child for the past twenty-four hours and she wasn’t giving up now.

While she kept her eyes on the road and the light traffic she let her other senses relax and accept the path that was formed with the child.

She was tired and hungry and very scared. Everything was blurry and confusing through the toddler’s mind. There was no way to fix on any information the child could give.

There was only one other way to find them. Through the mind of the kidnaper.

She pulled the car out of traffic once again. Why, oh why could it never be easy? There was no other choice. This case had a bad feeling to it from the beginning. Some perception of natural and unnatural. Whatever was happening was not natural.

Ridiculous. What was natural about anything she did? Not one thing. Her own abilities had been called unnatural more than once. It changed nothing. She still had a chance, admittedly a slim chance, to save this child and she was damn sure going to try. If it was her son, she wouldn’t give up. It was Sally’s daughter and she wasn’t going to give up.

And that left getting into a sick mind. Each one was different but ever kidnaper was sick, some part of them perverse beyond saving.

She rolled her head trying to loosen her knotted neck muscles and ease the pounding headache that using her abilities always caused. Nothing would help but a long sleep that she liked to call her reboot time. That wouldn’t happen until she had little Sarah back in her mother’s arms.

She reached out for Sarah’s immature mind and strengthened the link between them. Sorting through her mind revealed a single new detail, he call her baby, nice baby. That was all the connection she needed to grasp at the presence nearby little Sarah.

There. A man. Scared, no he was terrified. He hated and he hurt. A burning, ripping agony of hurt. Images of needles. Chains. Bars. Pills. Weapons. Fighting.

None of it made sense. The images were fragmented and had little connection to thoughts or memories. A kaleidoscope with no way to focus the direction. She pulled back to her own mind.

His pain. She could follow his pain. She pulled back into traffic cutting off an sedan and taking the first right to swing into an empty lot behind an industrial building. Abandoned of course. She dug through the clutter on her passenger seat the grab her cell phone. Capt. Rook was on speed dial. He would back her up even when he doubted her.

He answered on the first ring. "Hello?"

"Rook, it’s Kelly. Listen, I’m at 32nd and Long, the empty red brick building. Get here as fast as you can."

"You found her?"

"Yes. Just get here." She snapped the phone shut, dropping it in favor of the 38 cal. pistol which she put under her denim jacket in its should holster. Good thing she wasn’t a size two. Her natural curves hid any bulge that might be seen otherwise.

She grabbed up a picture of Sarah cradled lovingly by Sally’s ample arms. She would use anything she could to get the child to safety. Playing on a kidnaper’s conscious worked sometimes. The 38 worked in others. Either way, that child was leaving here with her.

She closed the door quietly and moved toward the source of wild emotions. Though a broken door and into the empty lobby...

6 comments:

  1. Well... Saxxon and Kelly both have good voices. They have picked up the reins of the story and run off with it.

    After 4 hours they now have over 13 pages. Although I have some idea where I want the story to go, I think I may just let them run for a while and see where they want it to go first.

    Also after my initial, thought about doing this as a trilogy... I have to say I think that Dain's story will be just as good as Saxxon's. How could it not be with completely, phycho hero. I mean, 'Dain Baby, you're awesome!'

    S
    going to bed to my new Seether CD.

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  2. Forgiven is now at 60 pages and still flying along. I've really only written on in for 3 days with some space between to let the characters stew.

    I'm not really surprised that there has turned out to be a lot of internal conflict. Despite being psychic, Kelly sees herself as a strong, independent average woman. She really wants to be the heroine in her own romance novel... (hey, Kelly, You are!)

    Saxxon on the other hand is strong and heroic in body but fragile and untrusting in his mind. He is stuggling for independence and relying on Kelly's strength to recover from abuse and addiction.

    Now after about 20 hours of being together, the rest of the world is beginning to intrude...

    Shannon
    working and writing to ... a commercial? WTF?

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  3. Okay, so here's what happened...

    After working on Forgiven for 3 days... not only did Kelly and Saxxon object to have anyone intrude on them, but also life decided to intrude on me as well. So, Forgiven studdered to a stop at 60 pages and sat until November, when I (in all my brilliance) decided to use it for my NaNo work.

    Now, I am back to work on it. Started Nano kind of late so I don't feel guilty about bringing an already started work into the game.

    shannon
    writing to old rock.

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  4. Forgot to mention that 'Forgiven' is up to 100 pages now.

    Shannon
    wishing she were writing to papa roach or seether. may have to turn on the i-tunes...

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  5. November 25th. Black Friday.

    First of all, what the heck was I thinking trying to shop against the professionals. I just have no right to be anywhere remotely near any shopping areas at 5 am on black friday. But the idea of a well proced lap top drew me out. I am such an innocent. I actually thought that if I showed up at 4:30 I would have a shance to get one...

    NOT.

    Me feeling silly.

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  6. Nano is going well today, but I am so far behind that my hopes of finishing are dismal.

    Today I have finished 4500 words and 20 pages. AND I am about to go write more.

    Unfortunately, that only gives me about 34500 words and 167 pages.
    That maybe sounds okay except that I am trying to not count the first 10K because it was written in October.

    So that leaves me needing 25500 words to finish at 60K.

    Broken down it comes to about 5000 a night, right up to the deadline.

    I think I can manage that over the weekend, but probably not when I go back to work. So to compensate... oh yuck! I will be trying to write 6-7000 words a day over the weekend to give me some breathing room for the start of the week.

    Back to it.

    Shannon
    Writing to "she talks to angels"
    appropriate, since Angel is in "Forgiven"

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